Hi , my name is Rene.
This is my 2nd Critique and im still a beginner in Digitial Art myself. At the moment i work through a load of tutorials and Art-Books to gather as many information as i can. I will use what ive learned so far to write a 100% honest critique and i dont want you to have any bad feelings. Before we start i want to say that i personally love your dark style.
So, what is the first thing that comes to my mind when i take an analytic look at your drawing ? Proportions it is , its really helpful that you uploaded a step by step version of this piece. Your Lineart (or Step1) looks already off in proportions. One example would be her upper Leg (Google Translate says its: thigh), it usually has around the lenght of 2 times her head. Yours is around one head lenght but im not 100% sure if you wanted them to look just cut off. In that case it lacks definition with Lineart and/or value/coloration.
The next thing would be symmetry + perspective. Her Breasts and her additional Spider-eyes are not positioned correclty. This somewhat belongs into the proportions-section aswell because you can avoid running into these mistakes with a more detailed construction of your sketch before the actual lineart. Coming back to perspective topics: The Spider-Legs on her back seem to be attached very randomly on her body. If you would cut out the actual women and just look at the spiderlegs , it seems that we look at a spider from a 3 quarter top view and this perspective doesnt work together with the perspective of the character itself.
The composition itself is good but it is very noisy if you ask me. We have that blue hair that instantly catches viewers attention and this doesnt come from its color alone. The spiderlegs in the back act somewhat like hidden arrows that point to the face. following down the face we have these belts around her breast that further lead down the body with all these nice details so yeah, your composition works very well. I dont like the Background , it implies a different lightsource than we see on the body. With Noisy i mean your combination of white/greyish lineart that looks very clean and the shading that looks more sprinkled or sprayed. These just dont go very well together and it looks that youre lines are to strong on the lower third and seem to vanish around her chest so we suddenly lose definition in that area.
I Love your ideas , design and the whole outfit im looking at here. I also love the somewhat lovecraft-ish style of darkness. My Tip would be that you spend more time on proportions and perspective , maybe take some reference of normal models and poses and turn these into your unique style (did that with my first work aswell
). You also seem to like your white lineart but i would recommend to just try doing a piece without them, defining everything with your style of shading/highlighting.
And please comment or note me if you have any questions.